100 word challenge week #29! I hope you like it!
Tonight was the night. After all our months of planning! The plan was
fool proof! When we got to the bank we both headed into the men’s bathroom and changed
into our black morph suits. He gave me a
gun; I slipped it under my suit and prayed that I didn't have to use it. We walked
out at the same time. “Get on the ground with your hands behind your head!” He
yelled. Everyone did as they were told; I walked to the counter and got them to
fill my bag with money. When suddenly the pain in my arm came! I had been shot!
What a gripping story! Good, short sentences provide tension.
ReplyDeleteExcellent use of punctuation.
Keep up the good writing.