This weeks 100 word challenge is a more serious topic. We got a picture of a boy from Ethiopia eating some food and explaining his circumstances, we had to start our 100 word challenge with if we share. Please leave comments and tell me what you think.
If We Share
If we share
He will have food in his belly,
He will have clean water to drink,
He will have hope.
If we share
He will have shoes on his feet,
He will have clothes on his back,
Life is looking up
If we share
He will be in school,
He will learn to read,
The chance to live a life that he never had
If we share
He will have a roof over his head,
He will have a place to rest his head,
He will have a life worth living.
If we share
We will change the world.
Ferron,
ReplyDeleteI love this - a great piece of poetry that really makes a point. I think your use of the repeating phrase is an excellent idea and really gives this structure.
I also think that your decision not to try and make this rhyme was a good one.
Keep it up!
Andrew
Team 100wc
Ferron,
ReplyDeleteSo sorry my last comment didn't appear here, I had internet connection issues.
I really like the way you use the repeating phrase, if we share - well done. I'm not sure about the use of he will however, what happens if a girl reads this?
Sorry again for the late comment.
Andrew
Team 100wc
I used the picture of the boy as the inspiration.
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